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The bar chart below give information about five countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The table chart illustrates the information about the
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 held by women in parliament and in management in 5 different countries in 2000.
It is clear that
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 the highest
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 was recorded in Canada in terms of government seats,
while
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 the lowest
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 was seen in
Rome
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according
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 to the government seat management in the given years. In terms of government seats, Canada had the highest
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, accounting for 54%.
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 was followed by Egypt, at 53%,
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 the figures for Italy, Ukraine, and
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 were 40%, 23%, and 10%.
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, compared to other countries
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Rome
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, Rome
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 had the lowest
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, at 10%.
According to
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 the seat management,
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 had a considerably higher
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 than other countries at 52%.
In contrast
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, Italy had the lowest
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 at 25%.
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, noticeable percentages were seen in Ukraine, Canada, and Egypt, at approximately 40%, 36%, 36%, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, rome with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 7 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spend
  • spending
  • on consumer goods
  • countries
  • year
  • 2012
  • highest
  • lowest
  • largest
  • smallest
  • difference
  • gap
  • range
  • between
  • among
  • more than
  • less than
  • than
  • in comparison
  • compared with
  • the chart shows
  • the chart compares
  • value
  • figure
  • percent
  • percentage
  • every
  • each
  • other
  • three
  • middle
  • two
  • first
  • second
  • third
  • overall
  • in general
  • close to
  • roughly
  • approximately
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