Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In my opinion i agree with
this
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said
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, as
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increasing the
fuel
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may help the environmental issue
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to
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begin with ,
fuel
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very
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is very
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important in the vehicle .
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, important for cars and
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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.
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,Cars can not move without it .
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,
still they can buying
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they can still buy
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fuel
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if it is still cheap. On
other
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hand , people who disagree with
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opinion may consider
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unfair for those who using there vehicle all the time. In conclusion, despite people having different views . I believe that
fuel
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as
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necessary for life quality.
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However
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the best action to take to fix
this
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probles
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problem
is
increase
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to increase
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the
fuel
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cost.

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Write a clearer answer to the question. Say if you fully agree, partly agree, or disagree, and keep this same view all through the essay.
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Add one more main idea about why higher fuel cost can help the environment, such as less car use or less air pollution.
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Use more clear and real examples. Your car example is relevant, but it is too short and not fully explained.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph have one clear main idea. This will help the essay feel more easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a more correct way, like 'To begin with', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion'. Check spaces and full stops too.
coherence and cohesion
Support each main point with one extra sentence of explanation. At the moment, ideas are present but not well developed.
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You answered the topic and gave your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
You used a simple paragraph structure with an opening and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You tried to use linking words to connect ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • emissions
  • alternative energy
  • conservation
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy technologies
  • affordability
  • collective action
  • innovation in energy efficiency
  • global cooperation
  • environmental measures
  • pollution
  • economic disparity
  • revenue
  • sustainable development
  • environmental sustainability
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