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The chart above provides information about the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in the 2002, 2006 and 2010.

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The bar chart compares the percentage of
men
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,
women
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, and
children
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 in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006, and 2010.
Overall
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,
women
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 consistently had the highest consumption rates across all three years,
while
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children
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 remained the lowest group throughout the period. All three groups peaked in 2006 before declining by 2010. In 2002, 25% of
women
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 met the recommended intake, slightly ahead of
men
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 at 22%,
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 only 11% of
children
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 did so. By 2006, all groups had increased significantly
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 the figure for
women
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 rose to 32%,
men
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 climbed to 28%, and
children
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’s consumption reached 16%, marking the highest levels recorded across the period.
However
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,
this
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 upward trend
reversed
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 by 2010. The proportion of
women
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 fell to 27%,
men
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 declined to 24%, and
children
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 dropped to 14%. Despite these decreases, all three groups in 2010 still consumed more fruit and vegetables than they had in 2002.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, children with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • the percentage of people
  • ate the recommended daily amount
  • fruit and vegetables
  • went up
  • went down
  • rose to
  • fell to
  • reached a high point
  • the highest figure
  • the lowest figure
  • throughout the period
  • compared with
  • in all three years
  • a small fall
  • a clear trend
  • healthy eating advice
  • follow the advice
  • the share of the population
  • men, women and children
  • from 2002 to 2010
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