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The chart below shows the percnetage of population living in the urban areas in the world and in different regions. Summarise the informationo by selecting and reporting main features, make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart compares the level of
urbanization
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urbanisation
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 of the globe and in different continents in 1975, 2020 and predictions for 2050.
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, in all six parts of the
world
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world,
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 the figures had
upward
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an upward
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 trend worldwide
increasing
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, increasing
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. Unlike
,
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apply
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 Africa and Asia, where less than half of the population used to live in cities until 2020, the reverse was true for
remaining
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the remaining
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 regions. Focusing on the largest figures
first,
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North
America
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 had the biggest proportion of citizens in urban areas ( approximately 75%), followed by Oceania, Europe and Latin
America
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with
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the
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a
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 gap of 5 percentage points among them respectively in 1975. Later, in 2020, North
America
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still
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was still
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was
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 top rated with almost 82
percents
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per cent
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, and
then
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 Latin
America
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, which saw
highest
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the highest
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rose
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rise
 reaching 80%.
Furthermore
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, in
Europe
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Europe,
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 75% of
population
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the population
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 was living in cities,
while
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 Oceania was the only continent with
negative
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a negative
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 change
dropping
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, dropping
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 below 70
percents
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per cent
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.
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, regarding the anticipations for 2050, the ranking is not going to be changed, albeit all regions will have an increasing trend. Coming to
lower
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the lower
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of
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end of
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 the spectrum, the proportion of people living in urban areas in Africa and Asia was almost the same
initially
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.
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in
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it
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 increased to just above 40% and about 50% in 2020, respectively.
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, the forecast for 2050 is merely under 60% and approximately 65% in these continents.
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,
in
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on
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 average, the
globalization
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globalisation
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 in the world
also
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 increased from almost 40% in 1975 to 55% in 2020.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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