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Some people think that children should begin formal education at a very early age. Others believe they should start school at the age of seven. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that
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 kids
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 learning at a very early
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 it is commonly held
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apply
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that children at
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age
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the age
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 of seven, there is
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 an argument
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 not adequate.
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand the main idea is should the parents give a formal education for them kids to achieve the enough knowledge earlier than at
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 at the nine they can solving a lot of concepts more than the adults at approximately 18 years right now, its
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 possible to say the children will take education more seriously and more abilities as a kids,
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 some students practices the responsibility above their abilities, just
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 being more than smartness to others.
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 my opinion is not going to work with
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 seven
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 rather at ten is appropriate. In conclusion,
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this
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 issue presents both positive and negative
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overall
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 consequences largely depend on the way it is handled and the measures taken to deal with it.
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, appropriate actions should be taken to reduce its negative effects and improve its outcomes

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Answer both sides more clearly. Say why early school is good and why age seven is good.
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Give your own view in a clear way and keep it the same from start to end.
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Add one clear example for each main idea. Make the example easy and real.
coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea in each body part. Do not mix many ideas in one long sentence.
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Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence follows the last one in a clear order.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction and a conclusion.
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You try to discuss the topic and give your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraphing, which helps the reader.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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