1-Should a visitor to another country follow local customs, or should the host country welcome cultural differences? Discuss and make sure to give your own opinion.

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tourism is
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important for a nation's reputation. Some
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think that
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from other countries should follow the
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and customs when they enter a new community.
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others opine that the host
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ought to accept their
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and respect them. In
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I will discuss the reasons behind both opinions before presenting my own view. On the one hand,
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the role of the other
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and
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their moral values
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visitors have
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experience. To explain, if
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respect other
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customs and traditions, that might be advantageous for their travel duration.
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, adapting new things from different
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culture
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cultures
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gives
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experience,
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explore
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various dressing, food and eating
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habits
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, every nation has
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own style, languages,
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could be
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better
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opportunity
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their travel time.
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,
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is necessary
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all
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tourists to follow the
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customs
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where they travel.
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, there are
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some neagtive factor which are not
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.
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,
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sometimes feel isolated
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suffocated in other places.
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is because they
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to obtain the living style of that
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due to
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difficult
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languages,
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are not easily
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learned
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, owing to tough
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they cannot communicate,
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also
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face difficulty
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themselves. As a
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, it makes them isolated
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further
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converted
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into stress. To cite an example, a recent
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conducted by
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well-known newspaper reveals that 70% of tourism
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past
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few years in some nations, because of their orthodox
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and behaviours. As a verdict,
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effecting worse on
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's
economy
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conditions. In conclusion,

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Answer both sides more clearly, then give your opinion in a clear way.
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Write a full conclusion. Your essay stops before the final idea is finished.
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Use more clear main ideas in each body paragraph and explain each one step by step.
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Give examples that are more clear and more direct to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph easier to follow. Start with one main point, then explain it, then give an example.
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Use linking words in a correct and natural way, such as on the one hand, on the other hand, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. Some sentences are hard to understand because the word order is weak.
coherence and cohesion
Use pronouns and repeated key words more carefully so the reader always knows what or who you mean.
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You discuss both views, so you understand the main task.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction shows the topic and your plan for the essay.
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You use paragraphs to separate ideas.
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You try to use examples to support your points.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • follow local customs
  • show respect
  • host country
  • cultural differences
  • adapt to
  • fit in
  • local laws
  • social rules
  • peaceful differences
  • mutual respect
  • cultural exchange
  • traditional clothes
  • greetings
  • religious places
  • public behavior
  • offend local people
  • welcome visitors
  • open-minded
  • way of life
  • balance between two sides
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