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The charts bellow give information about travel to and from UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.

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The charts illustrate
about
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how the proportion of residents
have
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 visited various
countries
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 from
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UK
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the UK
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Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
number
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 of residents visited differnent
countries
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 from
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UK
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the UK
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 had increased
throghout
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throughout
 the given time;
while
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,
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apply
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 the most
favorite
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favourite
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 destination for
UK
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 residents
were
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was
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 France. As a general trend, visiting
variety
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a variety
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 of
countries
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had increase
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has increased
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 over the period. It is conspicuous that in 1979, the
number
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 of person visited several places from
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UK
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the UK
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 began at over 10
million
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,
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this
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and this
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number
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 rose dramatically to just below 60
million
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 in 1999. Followed, in 1979, the
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amount
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number
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 of individual came for visit
UK
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 from
others
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other
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countries
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 started to
exactly
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reach
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 10
million
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;
however
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,
this
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 figure
go
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went
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 up steadily to just over 20
million
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. In France,
UK
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 citizens were the highest
number
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 of
visitor
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visitors
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, reaching
at
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11
million
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; followed by
, Spain
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Spain, which
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 was the second highest
amount
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 of tourist around 9
million
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. In
USA
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the USA
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, the figure for travler had moderately roughly 5
million
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. In Greece, the
number
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 of tourism had lower
amount
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 just 4
million
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. In Turkey,
The
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the number
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amount
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 of
visitor
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visitors
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 recorded the lowest figure
just
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, just
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 below 2
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, uk, number, million, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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