Governments should offer a free health care system to their citizens rather than relying on private health care. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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There is debate over whether free access to
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would return the investment to its citizens. Relying on the governments for access to
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generates a greater need for taxation, but if well
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improve the purchasing power by redirecting its reserved money back into
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economy. It seems to me that
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a
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step towards reducing inequality is to guarantee free
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would reduce the inequality
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increasing the money
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circulation that was previously destined
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Give a more clear answer to the question. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree in a direct way.
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Add one or two clear main ideas and explain each one more fully.
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Use a real or clear example to support your point.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas connect in a mostly clear way, but some parts feel long and not easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Split long sentences into shorter ones to make your meaning easier to see.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like first, also, for example, and so to guide the reader.
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You answer the topic and stay on the main point of health care.
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Your view is mostly clear: free health care can help reduce inequality.
coherence and cohesion
There is a basic start, middle, and end in your writing.
coherence and cohesion
You connect tax, health care, and money in a logical way.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal access
  • financial protection
  • medical bankruptcies
  • preventive care
  • early detection
  • disparities
  • social justice
  • resource limitations
  • economic impact
  • taxes
  • reallocation of funds
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