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IELTS Academic section2: Some people think having a university degree is the best way to secure a good job. However, others believe skills and experience are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays theme of getting an education is quite ambiguous. Some people think that only knowledge and discipline might be the best way to secure a good job. But other folk believe that no information is needed
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 if you have a huge amount of skills and experience in your profession.
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a trend among teenagers, education will always be demanded. Most parents since childhood tell that if you are smart enough for your age, life will be easier for you, and maybe they are right. Every person
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 nearly always chooses to be the best out of the best, but it means that you need toupgrade quality only in the knowledge that specialists give in educational institutions. But
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, some individuals might think that a university degree is nothing, in comparison with skills and experiences, and maybe they are right.
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 people find it very difficult to learn and use
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 perhaps adapt to learning from different ways, it is what you need to do now. In a nutshell, having a university degree is halfway and without experience little chances of success.

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Answer both sides more fully. Say why a degree helps, and say why skills and work help.
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Give your opinion clearly. You need one clear view in the end and also in the body.
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Use one or two real examples. This will make your ideas stronger.
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Make each body paragraph have one main idea. Then add support for it.
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Use clear linking words like first, however, for example, and in conclusion.
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Avoid very short or unclear sentences. Some ideas stop too early.
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You discuss both sides of the topic.
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You have an introduction and a conclusion.
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The essay has paragraph breaks, so the reader can follow it.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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