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Band 5

The plan below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

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The map
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the current layout of Southwest
Airport
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 and the planned redevelopment of the
airport
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 next year.
Overall
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, the
airport
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 is expected to become
significant
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significantly
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 larger and more
modernized
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modernised
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. The number of
gates
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 will increase considerably, new service facilities will be added in different parts of the
airport
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, and the terminal building will be expanded. In the departure
area
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, several major changes will take place. At present, passengers enter the
airport
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 and access the check-in counters located on the left side of the entrance. After redevelopment,
this
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area
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 will be converted into a bag-drop facility,
while
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 the new check-in
area
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 will be relocated to the opposite side. Beyond the security and passport control section, the current walkway leading to the
gates
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 will be replaced by a sky train running along the centre of the departure hall.
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, the number of
gates
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 will rise from 8 to 18, with extra
gates
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 being constructed on both sides of the existing boarding
area
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. Several shops will
also
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 be built alongside the new
gates
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. In the arrival
area
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, a cafe will be added on the left side of the arrival hall,
while
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 an ATM and a car hire service will be constructed opposite the facility. In order to accommodate these changes, the
airport
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 terminal will
also
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 be extended at the far end of the building.

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task response
Check small word form errors, like 'illustrate' to 'illustrates' and 'significant larger' to 'significantly larger'. These small errors can stop a higher band.
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Your overview is clear, but use more exact key changes in one sentence, like more gates, new train, and new services.
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You cover the main parts well, but a little more detail about the right side gate area would make the report more full.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay is easy to follow. To make it even better, use link words with more care, and do not repeat 'area' too much.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraphing is good. You can make the last paragraph stronger by grouping all arrival changes in a more neat order from left to right.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are long. Try to keep one main idea in one sentence so the flow stays very clear.
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You give a clear overview of the main changes, which is very important for Task 1.
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You include useful facts like the rise from 8 gates to 18 gates, and this helps support your points well.
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The report covers both departure and arrival parts, so the reader gets a full picture.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
The ideas move in a logical way, especially when you explain the departure part step by step.
coherence and cohesion
The use of paragraphs helps the reader follow the map changes easily.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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