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Some countries allow the young above 18 years to drive,drink or married. Some countries don't. Give reasons along with personal experience and what do you think is the ideal age for taking adult responsibilities.

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When the
grandparent
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 live with their grandson, it is bigest saftey source in the
home
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. The question is, what are the advantages and
disadvantages
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 of having
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grandparent
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a grandparent
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 living in the same
home
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.
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 In my opinion, I believe it is great for the family who having their
grandparent
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 living with them. In
this
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 essay, I am going to discuss the advantages and
disadvantages
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about
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this
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 case and give my opinion. First of all, there are many benefits of having
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eldery
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elderly
 people in the family
home
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. One of the benefits
the
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The elderly
eldery
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 always take care of the children if the
parents
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 are not in the
home
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.
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, the
grandparent
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 will be able to cook food if the children
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are hungry
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,
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therefore
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, there are many
parents
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bring
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who bring
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 their
parents
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 to live with them in the same
home
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.
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, my grandfather is living with us, sometimes my
parents
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 are not in the
home
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,
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, my grandfather always cook the launch for us.
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, there are many
disadvantages
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 of having
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eldery
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elderly
 people in the
home
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.
some
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 of the
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 is not able to go to the toilet alone.
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therefore
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, they need help all the time.
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,
thety
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they
 get sick quickly
,
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therefore
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, they want to go to the emergency hospital.
some
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 of the
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eldery
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elderly
 are not able to take care of the children or
rise
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raise
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 them because
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 generation is soft.
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, my grandfather is not able to rise us
and
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, and
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 sometimes my
fahter
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father
 has to come back
home
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 to take him to the hospital. In conclusion, I would argue that the family
home
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 who having
eldery
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 people is great.
even
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 though there are
disadvantages
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, however
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however
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however,
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 the advantages
outcome
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outweigh
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 the
disadvantages
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Answer both sides in a full way. Write more about the good side and the bad side with clear main ideas.
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Give one clear opinion and keep it the same from start to end.
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Use more clear examples to support each main point.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each body part. Then add 2 or 3 support lines.
coherence and cohesion
Use link words in a careful way, for example: First, Also, However, For example, In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one.
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You answer the question and talk about both advantages and disadvantages.
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You give a personal example about your grandfather, and this helps your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use some link words like First of all, Moreover, However, and In conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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