You recently ordered a product online, but when it arrived, it was damaged. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: Describe the product you ordered Explain the damage to the product Say what you would like the company to do

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

this

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letter to submit a

complain

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complaint

about the delivery of a broken

laptop

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yesterday. I purchased a black-coloured Dell

laptop

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from your company's official website

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the

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price of $495

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to ease my academic journey. I was so excited

for receiving

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to receive

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it as it is

hepful

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helpful

to prepare my assignments. Unfortunately, when I opened the

package

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package,

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the

laptop

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's screen was

severly

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severely

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damaged. Since it is in no working condition, I felt very disappointed and have my presentations pending ehich need a

laptop

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. I would really appreciate it if you could exchange it for a new one. I am

read

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ready

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to send back the broken one either by mail or in person at your store,

which ever

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whichever

best

suites

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suits

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you. Indeed, I have a

20 second

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20-second

packaging opening video that I was making to post on my social media as

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proof, and the original packaging

intact

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is intact

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with me. I look forward to hearing back from you promptly. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Gurjeet Kaur Gill

gurigill5533

May 11, 2026

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task response

Task response: You answer all parts of the task, but add a bit more detail about the damage and how it affects you.

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Task response: Use more correct words and grammar, for example 'complaint' not 'complain'. This will make your message more clear.

coherence and cohesion

Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Try to link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'so', and 'because'.

coherence and cohesion

Coherence and cohesion: Keep each sentence clear and short. A few lines are hard to follow because of word form and spelling mistakes.

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Task response: You describe the product, the damage, and what action you want. This fully answers the task.

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Task response: Your tone is polite and fits a formal letter.

coherence and cohesion

Coherence and cohesion: The letter is in good paragraph order.

coherence and cohesion

Coherence and cohesion: You use a proper greeting and closing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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1
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

172 words

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