The graph below shows the numbers of people in four US states working in the motor-vehicle industry from 1990 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates information about average annual employment in the motor-vehicle industries for Michigan, Indiana,
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Ohio,
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throughout the period between 1990 and 2010.
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four states exhibit different trends over the given time, Alabama and Indiana followed an upward trajectory,
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Michigan and Ohio showed a decline.
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, the rates of increase and decrease varied between them. As the image shows, Alabama and Indiana began at around zero and slightly under 10000
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in 1990, followed by a gradual increase until the end of 2010 to just above 10000
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for both
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of people working in Michigan started at over 100,000
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in 1990, after that saw
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, but by 2000, dropped significantly to just under 60,000
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, before dramatically declining to nearly 35,000
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in 2010. Regarding the
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of staff working in
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industry in Ohio commenced at 40,000
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,
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steadily fluctuated from 1990 to 2000,
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that experienced a dip to approximately 20,000
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in 2010.

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