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Band 6

You have recently moved into a new house. You want to tell your friend about your good news. Write to your friend. In the letter: • Describe the house. • Describe the neighbourhood. • Invite your friend to come and see the house. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...,

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Dear Rachel, I am excited to share some good news with you! Recently
Alvin
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 and I
moved-in
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moved into
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 a new
house
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 in Scarborough. It is a two-storey townhouse opposite your favourite mall, Scarborough Town Centre. There is a beautiful trail behind our
house
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, which leads to a tiny freshwater pond. Alvin and I go to the pond every evening to watch the sunset. I absolutely love our new neighbourhood. I was surprised to find many Indian and Sri Lankan stores and restaurants in the vicinity. All the places we visit are a couple of
minutes
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 away
via
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by
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 car. Our family doctor's clinic is five
minutes
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 away,
and
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Tommy's dog day care is three
minutes
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 away, and your favourite nail salon, Tiffany's, is ten
minutes
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 away. So, I want to invite you to our lovely, new
house
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,
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this
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 Friday evening
,
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 at 7PM. Alvin and I are hosting a small get-
together with
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 our friends and families,
instead
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 of organising a grand
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house warming
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housewarming
 ceremony. Here is our address
:
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:
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 70 Town Centre, Scarborough, ON M1P. Please let me know if you will be available to attend our event. I look forward to
hear
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 from you. Lots of love, Krithi

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts of the task well. To get a higher score, add one or two more details about the house inside, like the rooms or garden.
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Task response: Your tone is warm and friendly. For a higher score, use a few more natural phrases, like 'moved into a new house' and 'I look forward to hearing from you'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow and the order is clear. To make it even better, avoid one very long sentence about places near your house. You can split it into two shorter sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has one main idea, which is good. To improve more, link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'so', and 'because' when needed.
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Task response: You describe the house, the area, and the invitation clearly, so the reader gets all the needed points.
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Task response: The letter sounds friendly and personal, which fits a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear beginning, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your greeting and closing are both good and fit the letter style.
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