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Band 6

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, s1 and s2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 key
informations
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information
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 about two places
s1
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, S1
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 and s2 to constract shopping mall in Brandfield city. In
this
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eassy
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essay
 I will
discusses
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discuss
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 the significant information and features about the
s1
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S1
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 and
s2
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S2
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.
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, it is clear from the map that
s1
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the S1
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 location is more appropriate for
development
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developing
 the mall,
due to
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surrounded
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being surrounded
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the area
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apply
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by many
near
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nearby
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 services and facilities. In
constract
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contrast
, S2 location is
to
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too
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 far from the housing
estate
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estate,
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that is
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 mean the people should cross the river to go to
the
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apply
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area 2.
According to
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 what is
showen
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shown
,
S1
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the S1
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 area is close to
housing
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the housing
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 estate from the North, and it is bordered by
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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 from the south.
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, from east and southeast it is
surounded
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 by huge Gulf Coures,
also
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 the more crucial think it is
to
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apply
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far from industrial
.
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areas.
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 In terms of, s1
show
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shows
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 that
too
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it is too
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 close
from
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to
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 the industrial estate, and
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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 borders
the
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apply
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s1 from the north, and
Golf
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the Golf
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 Course and Park from the west.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "informations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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