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Some people think environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. Do you agree or disagree?

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people
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 think environmental
protection
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 is the
responsibility
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 of
politicians
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, not
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individuals
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individuals,
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 as
individuals
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 can do too little. Do you agree or disagree? Some
people
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 think environmental
protection
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 is the
responsibility
Use synonyms
 of
politicians
Use synonyms
, not
Use synonyms
individuals
Punctuation problem
individuals,
show examples
 as
individuals
Use synonyms
 can do too little. Do you agree or disagree?Some
people
Use synonyms
 think environmental
protection
Use synonyms
 is the
responsibility
Use synonyms
 of
politicians
Use synonyms
, not
Use synonyms
individuals
Punctuation problem
individuals,
show examples
 as
individuals
Use synonyms
 can do too little. Do you agree or disagree?Some
people
Use synonyms
 think environmental
protection
Use synonyms
 is the
responsibility
Use synonyms
 of
politicians
Use synonyms
, not
Use synonyms
individuals
Punctuation problem
individuals,
show examples
 as
individuals
Use synonyms
 can do too little. Do you agree or disagree?Some
people
Use synonyms
 think environmental
protection
Use synonyms
 is the
responsibility
Use synonyms
 of
politicians
Use synonyms
, not
Use synonyms
individuals
Punctuation problem
individuals,
show examples
 as
individuals
Use synonyms
 can do too little. Do you agree or disagree?

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coherence and cohesion
Write a full essay with an intro, 2 body parts, and an end.
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Answer the question clearly. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree.
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Give main ideas and explain each one with a clear example.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like first, also, but, so, and in the end.
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The topic is clear and easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
The writing repeats the key idea, so the reader knows the subject.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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