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The internet is an amazing invention which has changed the world. Many people use it. Give the advantages and disadvantages of the internet.

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The
internet
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 is an amazing invention which has changed the world. Many
people
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use
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 it. Give the advantages and disadvantages of the
internet
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. There
is
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are
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 a
gret
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great
 deal of advantages that we can get from the
internet
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.
First,
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information is all over the
internet
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 in many useful forms. On one hand, students can research
diversed
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diverse
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,
people
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 would be able to access
world-wide nwes easally
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worldwide news easily
.
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Moreover
, the
internet
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 is
knowen
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known
 for being a source of amazing entertainment.
such
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watching movies or shows with our loved ones.
kids
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Kids
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 love the wide range of video games that are offered on the
internet
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.
As well as
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,
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 education
that is
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 very
accesable
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accessible
 to all
people
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 by
easally
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easily
 pressing a
bouten
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button
 There are
meny
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many
 disadvantages
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 the
internet
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First,
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it is bad for health and they
distroy
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destroy
 eyes. There are
meny
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many
people
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 wacet time in
internet
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 and forget the normel life.
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, children can develop their skills.
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hackers can take your information and your
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 number. Some
people
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 think the
intrnet
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internet
 is to safte
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, but
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 hackers
make
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put
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 you in risky.
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, hackers can
make
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 your family in danger.
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, the
internet
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 has no privacy. Human has take photo for there family
it
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, it
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 to bad to get your brother or your son any
privecy
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privacy
.
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also
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,
If
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if
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 you
dont
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don't
 give your family
a
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privacy
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privacy,
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 it to
scard
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go
 to go any war
people
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 seek on In conclusion, it is easy to see that the
internet
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 has both
,
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 advantages and disadvantages.

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coherence cohesion
Write one clear main idea in each body part. Then add 2 or 3 simple support lines.
coherence cohesion
Use easy link words well: First, Also, For example, However, Finally.
coherence cohesion
Check that each sentence fits the same main idea. Do not jump from one point to a new point too fast.
task achievement
Answer both sides in a balanced way. Your essay does this, but the bad side has more points than the good side.
task achievement
Give clearer examples. For example, say what kind of study, news, or game you mean.
task achievement
Some ideas are not clear or are not fully true, like children can develop their skills in the bad side. Explain why it is bad, or move it to the good side.
task achievement
You answer both parts of the task: good points and bad points.
coherence cohesion
You have an introduction idea, body parts, and a short end.
coherence cohesion
You use some link words like First, Also, Second, Finally, and In conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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