**You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged.** **Write a letter to your friend. In the letter:** - **apologise for the damage to the item** - **explain what happened** - **say how you are going to fix the issue**

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Try for free →
Hi Sam, I hope
this
Linking Words
letter finds you in good health and high spirits. I'm writing
this
Linking Words
letter in order to express my apology for the damage which is caused
due to
Linking Words
my negligence. As you are aware
that
Correct word choice
,
show examples
I borrowed a
laptop
Use synonyms
from you
,
Correct determiner usage
a
show examples
couple of weeks
age
Replace the word
ago
since my
laptop
Use synonyms
was
Verb problem
apply
show examples
suddenly broke down. Unfortunately, when I was completing my assignment for the project which
we've
Correct your spelling
we have
to submit in the coming days,my younger brother came to me all of
sudden
Correct article usage
a sudden
show examples
and dropped your
laptop
Use synonyms
on the floor.What's more, I saw a big crack on
it's
Use the right word
its
show examples
screen ,which I know will not
going to
Wrong verb form
apply
show examples
be
an
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
acceptable. In fact, I scolded him too for
this
Linking Words
;
however
Linking Words
,he's too small to know the difference between good
or
Correct word choice
and
show examples
bad. Sam, I totally understand that
this
Linking Words
laptop
Use synonyms
cost you an arm and
leg
Correct article usage
a leg
show examples
. On top of that, our
exam
Fix the agreement mistake
exams
show examples
are coming next month . I'm ready to pay for your loss. Please let me know how
would you
Correct word order
you would
show examples
like me to reimburse your damage.Either you want me to pay for its repair or replacement.
I'm
Verb problem
I
show examples
agree with your choice. Thank you so much for understanding.Let's meet at my home and enjoy a cup of coffee together. Lots of love, Hannah

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but some ideas are not clear. Keep each point short and direct.
task response
Task response: Use a more natural tone in some lines. For example, make the apology simple and warm.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end, which is good.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some sentences are too long and hard to follow. Use shorter sentences and simple link words.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each paragraph so the letter is easier to read.
task response
You cover the three bullet points in the task.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing fit a friendly letter well.
coherence cohesion
The order of ideas is mostly easy to follow.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: