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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

People in your area are having problems with their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection.

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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, I'm writing
this
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 letter to make a complaint about the poor internet connection
affected to
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affecting
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 our
area
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 from your mobile company. I'm currently
lives
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living
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 in Croydon
park
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Park
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,
people and I
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and people
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 who
lives
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live
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 in
this
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area
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having
Verb problem
have been having
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 a
problem
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 with
an
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the
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 internet connection since
last
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january
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January
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.
Apperently
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Apparently
, the
problem
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caused
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is caused
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 by low signal strength. If I moved to another
area
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, the
strength of signal comes
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signal strength would come
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 back. There are
lot
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a lot
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 of people around
this
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area
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 who works in home
including
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, including
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 me,
So
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so
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this
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 situation is a pretty big
problem
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to croydon park
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for the Croydon Park
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 community.
Moreover
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,
this
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 issue
also
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 affect to the children and students who
doing
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are doing
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 their studies online. If you can do something to make the signal strength high, it would
be eliminated
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eliminate
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 the
problem
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. So,
Croydon
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the Croydon
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park
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Park
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 community and I
looking
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are looking
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 forward to have quick solution for
this
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problem
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 as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Dinith

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Say the problem, when it started, and how it hurts people more clearly.
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Ask for one clear action from the company, like checking the signal in your area.
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Use a more formal style. For example, write 'I am writing to complain about...'
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph: problem, effects, and request.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy linking words like 'First', 'Also', and 'So' to join ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order so each sentence follows the one before in a clear way.
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You clearly say why you are writing.
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You give real effects on workers, children, and students.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are grouped into paragraphs.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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