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The bar chart below shows the production of the world’s oil in OPEC and non-OPEC countries. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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This
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 chart shows the
number of the
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world's
oil
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production
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 in
OPEC
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 and
non-
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OPEC
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 countries. There are three shades of blue in the chart that
illustrates
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illustrate
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non-
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OPEC
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, other
OPEC
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 and
OPEC
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middle
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 East. The information is categorized to three different
times
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periods
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, which are 1980-2000, 2000-2010 and 2010-2020.
At
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In
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 the first two
decades
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decades,
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 the
production
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 of
oil
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 was low. At that
time
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time,
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 other
OPEC
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 countries included 13
quantity
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members
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. Between 2000 and
2010
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2010,
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 the number of
oil
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manufacture
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manufacturers
 wildly increased.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore,
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 the
production
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 of
non-
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OPEC
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, Other
OPEC
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 and
OPEC
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middle
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 East
also
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 increased, and among
them
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them,
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non-
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OPEC
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 countries got highest point with 8. In the 2010-2020
years
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years,
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 the
production
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 of
oil
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become more
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became
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 lower than in 2000-2010 years.
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Nevertheless
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Nevertheless,
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 the amount of
generation
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apply
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oil
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 in
non-
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OPEC
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rises
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countries rises
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. For conclusion at 2000-2010
years
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,
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oil
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manufacture in
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manufacturing
 was at the top point. Year by year manufacture of
non-
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OPEC
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 places
grow
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grows
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, production, opec, non-opec with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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