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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buving and drinking habits in five Australlan cities.

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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buving and drinking habits in five Australlan cities.
The graph illustrates the outcome of a survey conducted in the largest Australian
cities
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:
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart. The respondents were asked whether they bought fresh or
instant
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coffee
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 and whether they had
coffee
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 or tea outside of the home in
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last
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the last
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 four weeks.
Overall
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, the
option
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 of dining out is the most popular one in most of the
cities
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. It is
also
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 clear that the people who bought fresh
coffee
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 have the smallest share
amoung
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among
 other respondents. It can be seen that Australian urban residents mostly prefer having drinks at a
cafe
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 to making them at home. In
two
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cities
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,
Sydney
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 and
Melbourne
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, the share of the '
cafe
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' choice is significantly higher than the second
popular
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option
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, which is '
instant
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coffee
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'. In Brisbane and
Hobart
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Hobart,
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 those
two
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 options are very close, and in Adelaide bying
instant
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coffee
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 outraced the dining out
option
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. Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart results have many similarities. All the mentioned
cities
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 have quite
low
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a low
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 level of fresh
coffee
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 buyers, and the gap between
instant
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coffee
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 and
cafe
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 choices is very low. In
other
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the other
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two
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cities
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,
Sydney
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 and
Melbourne
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, the '
cafe
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'
option
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 is considerably higher than
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two others
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the other two
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, peaking at more than 60
percent
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per cent
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 in
Melbourne
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 and
Sydney
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, sydney, melbourne, instant, coffee, option, cafe, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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