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The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

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The graph displays the expenditure on
books
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 in four countries between 1995 and 2005.
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, spending on
books
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 increased in all four countries during the period. Germany spent the highest amount on
books
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at the end
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 of the period. In 1995, Germany spent approximately 80
million
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dollars
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 on
books
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, which was far higher than the
fiqures
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figures
 for the other countries.
This
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 number rose steadily to about 90
million
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 in 1999, dipped slightly in 2003 and reached a peak of roughly 95
million
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dollars
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 in 2005. France
also
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demonsrated
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demonstrated
 a gradual increase, climbing from around 55
million
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dollars
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 in 1995 to nearly 75
million
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 by the end of the period. Italy's expenditure was lower and more stable. It started at 50
million
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dollars
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, fluctuated slightly over the years, and
finally
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 rose to around 62
million
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 in 2005. Austria began with the lowest
fiqure
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figure
, at only 30
million
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dollars
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, but increased sharply after 2001 to reach about 70
million
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dollars
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 in 2005.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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