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The given graph shows the nitrogen oxide emissions produced by four vehicles. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart illustrates the
amount
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 of gas released from four types of motor vehicles compared to their speeds.
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, the most significant
amount
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 of
emission
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emissions
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 is conducted by buses, the second highest values belong to lorries. The automobiles of both types of engine (gasoline and diesel) are the lowest in
emitting
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emissions of
 gases. On the one hand, the
amount
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 of pollution released from public transport vehicles is constantly decreasing
while
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 their velocity grows, starting from 40
g
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/
km
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 at 10
kph
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 and culminating at slightly more than 25
g
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/
km
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 when moving at 60
kph
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.
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, there is a sharp increase in
emission
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emissions
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 when they exceed 60
kph
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, eventually bringing it to
narly
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nearly
 45
g
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/em, which is above the initial level.
Similarly
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, the lorries maintain a gradual drop in nitrogen oxide
prodicing
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production
 with a cut-off point of 17
g
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/
km
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 at 90
kph
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, where the
amount
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 of gas starts to rise, finishing below the 25
g
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/
km
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 level.
On the other hand
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, all kinds of small automobiles showed moderate and stable trends.
For instance
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, the
amount
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 of gas released by petrol cars does not
outnumber
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exceed
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 15
g
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/
km
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at
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under
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 any moving condition. The diesel-fueled engines tend to have
even
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an even
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 more eco-friendly profile. They make
slight
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a slight
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 but constant decline,
finally
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 reaching 5
g
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/
km
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 at a maximum velocity, which is the lowest result for all kinds of vehicles considered.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, g, km, kph with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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