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In some countries the government promotes public transport as the primary means of transportation, and discourages private vehicle ownership. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

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The public
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 transportation has become a subject of growing discussion.
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 there are certain benefits of private
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vehicle
 ownership, I firmly believe that the disadvantages significantly outweigh the advantages of
utlilising
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utilising
 public
transport
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. It must be acknowledged that private transporation including
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apply
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car
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cars
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 and
bikes
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bikes,
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 does present some advantages
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such
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, such
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 as comfort during travelling for work. The main concern is that it contributes
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to the increase in
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 increase of global warming.
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 to that, it affects
economy
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the economy
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 of some countries as well.
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, recently the prime minister of India has urged everyone
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not to use
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cars
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 so that
country
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the country
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 can control the gas prices.
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 comfort during travel is a valid consideration, it is relatively minor when viewed in
broder
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broader
 context.
On the other hand
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, the benefits of using public
transportaion
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transportation
 are far more substantial. First and foremost, it saves the
enviornment
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environment
 as less vehical will be on
road
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the road
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 and pollution produced from
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them
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 will decrease
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every day
.
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, recently Japan has made public
transport
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 mandatory for everyone and
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result
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result,
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 they saw 20% reduction in air pollution.
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,
government
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the government
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 can save
economy
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the economy
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 by controlling gas prices across
country
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the country
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.
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 together, these points clearly demonstrate that promoting public
transport
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 is a predominantly positive
develomment
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development
. In conclusion,
while
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convenience
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the convenience
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 of having
own
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one's own
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vehical
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vehicle
 is
valid
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a valid
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 factor, I am convinced that
advantages
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the advantages
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 of using public
transport
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, particularly
reduction
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the reduction
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 in air pollution and saving
country
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the country
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 from
economy
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economic
 crisis, far outweigh the disadvantages.

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task response
Answer the question more directly. Say clearly why the good points are stronger than the bad points.
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Develop each main idea more. Explain how public transport helps people, cities, and the environment.
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Use examples that feel more real and clear. Some examples sound weak or not fully true.
coherence and cohesion
Keep your ideas in a clearer order. One body paragraph should focus on one side only.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more carefully, such as 'however', 'for example', and 'therefore'.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence connects well to the next one. Some parts jump too fast.
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You give a clear opinion in the introduction and keep it to the end.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear beginning, middle, and end.
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You use examples to support your ideas.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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