Some people think the best option is to accept a difficult situation, such as having a job they do not enjoy or not having enough money. Others believe it is better to try to make such situations better. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The majority of individuals believe that difficult circumstances are just to resign and accept the outcome,
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others think that they should try to make things better , and I agree with the latter idea.
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, it depends on the scenario
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some situations can become a lot worse if you try to improve
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, if you are a footballer with even a minor injury, you should not play the next match , even if it is the most vital one in the season, because it only makes your situation worse, as your injury can become fatal for your career or lead to some surgeries that could
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potentially end your career.
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, if a character is in a dilemma, trying to resist it can not change anything;
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, if a guy is in a relationship where things are not good, that person should not try brute force, because it won't change anything and it will even cause a dissapointment. The former example related to football was the
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for me , and now I am far away from playing football for a few months.
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, if people is not satisfied in the place or the value they recieve, they have to try something even if that could end with a dismal, because in that
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in the future they will not have a thought of "Maybe it could be better if I tried"
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thought is the worst thing that can appear in a person's mind, which will follow him until his burial.
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individual's relative is severely ill, he should try to heal them even if the panacea
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that sickness is not reliable and cannot fully heal the somebody. I have had
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kind of situation where my grandmother died,
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atleast I do not have the feeling of guilt ,so
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it is best to try to do your best and hope for the best outcome. Ultimately, there are some scenarios that you can not change
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a person should try their best to do things better and hope for it.

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Task response: You answer both views and give your opinion, but your opinion is not always very clear in the body. Make it clear in each main part.
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Task response: Some ideas are hard to understand. Use shorter sentences and explain one idea at a time.
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Task response: Your examples are personal and relevant, which is good, but some examples do not fully match the main point. Link each example more clearly to the idea.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an end, so the basic shape is good.
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Coherence and cohesion: Some linking is weak. Use simple words like 'first', 'however', 'for example', 'because', and 'therefore' in a clear way.
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Coherence and cohesion: Some sentences do not connect well to the next one. Group similar ideas in one paragraph and avoid adding new ideas suddenly.
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You discuss both sides of the topic and give your own view.
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You use real examples from life, and this helps support your ideas.
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Your essay has an introduction and a conclusion.
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The order of paragraphs is easy to follow in general.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accept
  • difficult
  • situation
  • job
  • money
  • option
  • view
  • discuss
  • own
  • opinion
  • better
  • improve
  • change
  • plan
  • goal
  • effort
  • risk
  • skill
  • learn
  • life
  • work
  • future
  • save
  • decide
  • problem
  • help
  • step
  • stay
  • move
  • balance
  • decision
  • support
  • hope
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