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Some people point that experiential learning can work well in formal education. However, others think a traditional form of teaching is the best. Do you think experiential learning can work well in high schools or colleges?

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In
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 modern era, the effectiveness of different teaching approaches has become the subject of considerable debate. Some people contend that practical, experience-based learning can be successfully integrated into secondary and higher education,
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 others favour conventional classroom instruction. In my opinion, experiential learning is highly effective because it enables students to apply theoretical knowledge and develop critical thinking skills.

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Write more. This is only an introduction, so your answer is not complete.
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Add 2 body parts and a short end part. This will help you answer the full task.
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Give at least one real and clear example to support your view.
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Your ideas are clear, but they need more detail and explanation.
coherence and cohesion
The text is easy to follow, but it is too short to show full control.
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Use linking words between main ideas, such as 'first', 'also', and 'in the end'.
coherence and cohesion
Each body part should have one main idea and support for it.
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Add a conclusion to close your essay in a clear way.
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You clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
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Your main idea is relevant to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
The sentence order is clear and easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction gives a good start to the essay.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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