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school teachers used to be the source of information . However, some people argue that teachers are not as important as before as the increasing variety of information resources. Do you agree or disagree.

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Answer the full question more clearly. Say why you disagree and add one or two clear reasons.
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Add a real example. For example, say how a teacher helps a student in class better than a phone or web page.
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Make each main idea bigger. Now the ideas are very short, so the answer feels thin.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear plan: intro, body 1, body 2, conclusion. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, for example, and in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph and explain it before you move to the next idea.
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You gave a clear opinion: you disagree and say teachers are more important.
coherence and cohesion
You have a short ending that repeats your main view.
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Your ideas stay on the topic of teachers and information sources.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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