Some people believe that government should spend more money on causes of crime and others state that money shuld be spent on punishment to criminals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is said by some individuals that the government funds should be allocated to addressing the root causes of crime,
whereas
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others believe that money should be used for punishing criminals. In my opinion, if the causes of crimes are given more attention by the government,
this
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will develop responsible and disciplined citizens in a country.

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Write a full essay, not only an opening part. You need both views and your opinion.
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Add one clear idea for each side. Then explain each idea with a simple reason.
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Give one real or clear example to support your ideas.
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Use clear paragraphs: introduction, body 1, body 2, conclusion.
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Link ideas with simple words like however, because, for example, and in conclusion.
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Make your main point easy to follow. Each sentence should connect to the one before it.
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You clearly show the topic in your first sentence.
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You give your opinion, which is important in this task.
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Your opening sentence is easy to understand.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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