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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out the history of the building they live in. What are the reason for this? How can people reasearch this?

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Nowadays,
people
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 in some countries are interested
about
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in
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 the
history
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 of the place they live. There are many reasons why
this
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 trend has become popular as
learn
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people learn
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 about
structure
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, cultural value, and more. I will discuss these reasons in the following paragraphs with possible
way
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 to conduct
such
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 research.
First
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The first
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 reason for
this
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 trend is
structure
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. From the
house
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's or building's
structure
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, we can know
layout
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the layout
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 and material of construction.
Material
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The material
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 of construction affects
safety
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the safety
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 of
people
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 living there.
Because to
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To
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 reduce the cost, many companies use poor quality materials. It makes the building rapid degraded and dangerous for
people
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 living there. The layout of
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house hold
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household
 items to show homeowner's life styles.
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, most Indian clients prefer black marble in the kitchen
instead
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 of white because
the
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of the
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 type of food they cook.
Secondly
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, the
history
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 of the
house
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 on
building
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the building
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 they live have to
cultural
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be cultural
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vale
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value
. Imagine the
house
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 you are living in used to be a historical
base
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site
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 or the home of a famous person. "Viet Phu Thanh Chuong' is an example, it used to be hero Thanh
Chuong’
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Chuong’s
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 home. Today
it
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, it
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 has become a symbol of ancient culture. If your
house
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 was once owned by a famous person in
history
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,
it was
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its
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 value will increase significantly. There are several ways
people
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 can research the
history
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 of a
house
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 or building. Official sources
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such
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, such
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 as government
land
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land,
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 can provide reliable information.
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, speaking with
long term
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long-term
 residents on neighbours can reveal personal stories that are not recorded in official documents. In conclusion,
people
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 are interested about
history
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 of the
house
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on
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in
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 the building they live
by
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in,
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 the
structure
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, cultural value. By using a combination of official records and stories
are
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apply
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told by
long term
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long-term
 residents,
people
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 can uncover the past of the building they live
.
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in.
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task response
Answer both parts more fully. You gave reasons and ways, but some points are not fully explained.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer main ideas for each body paragraph. One paragraph for reasons, one paragraph for ways can help.
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Add more direct examples about how people can find the history, such as old maps, family records, or local library files.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple clear way. Use words like First, Also, For example, Finally.
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Check that each sentence clearly connects to the question. Some parts about kitchen color and style are not very close to the main point.
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You answered both questions in the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You used some examples to support your ideas.
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