IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

You borrowed something from your friend and accidentally damaged it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: * explain what happened * apologize for the damage * say how you will fix the situation

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Start now →
Dear Tim, I am writing
this
Linking Words
 letter
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
 to let you know that
i
Fix capitalization
I
show examples
 have damaged the
camera
Use synonyms
 that you gave me a week ago. As you know, I took your
camera
Use synonyms
 to
click
Verb problem
take
show examples
 the pictures in the jungle.
While
Linking Words
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
 clicking the photos of the duck, a lion came out of nowhere and
i
Fix capitalization
I
show examples
 got scared and
drop
Wrong verb form
dropped
show examples
 the
camera
Use synonyms
 in the pond.After
few
Correct article usage
a few
show examples
 minutes i tried to go back and take the
camera
Use synonyms
 from the pond
but
Punctuation problem
, but
show examples
my
Change preposition
at
show examples
 that time, it was completely damaged. I sincerely apologise for my mistake
and
Punctuation problem
, and
show examples
i
Fix capitalization
I
show examples
 know it was very much precious to you, as your father gifted
this
Linking Words
camera
Use synonyms
 on your 18th birthday and you have clicked
lot
Correct article usage
a lot
show examples
 of memories from
this
Linking Words
 Lens. To make things up i have ordered the new
camera
Use synonyms
which
Punctuation problem
, which
show examples
 is going to be delivered on 11th May 2026. I know it will not be that special
but
Punctuation problem
, but
show examples
 you still click different photos from
this
Linking Words
 cool
Camera
Use synonyms
. Again i would like to apologise for my mistake. Your truly, Ayush Shukla.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Task response: You answer all parts of the task, but add a bit more clear detail about how you will pay or replace it.
task response
Task response: Your tone is mostly good, but some lines sound a bit strange. Keep the style warm and natural.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a clear order, but some link words are not used well. Use simple links like 'so', 'then', and 'after that'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Check each paragraph. Try to keep one main idea in one paragraph.
task response
Task response: You explain what happened, say sorry, and tell how you will fix it. This is a full answer.
task response
Task response: The letter feels personal and caring, which is good for a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You use paragraphs, and this helps the reader follow your story.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: