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The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates the average CO2 emissions per individual in four countries UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal
between
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, between
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 1967 and 2007.
Overall
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UK
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the UK
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was
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had
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 the highest figures
in
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for
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 the
first
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time
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,
while
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 at the same
time
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, Portugal
was
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had
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 the lowest. Sweden had a dramatic decline after a slight rise in the
first
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of
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part of
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 the period.
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, Italy
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apply
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showed stability
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 the end of the period.
First
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 of all, from 1967 to 1977,
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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 stood for slightly above 10%. By 1987, it had a
progress
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progressive
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that
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 recorded for 8%. Sweden,
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 the
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time
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, started with above 8%,
subsequntly
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subsequently
, it went up gradually by 2%. From 1977 to 1987, it had a significant decrease to near 6%. From 1997 to 2007, it went down slightly until the
last
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 reached above 4%. By 1967, Italy scored for 4%, and it showed a stable rise to above 6%. By 1987, it rose slightly to under 8%
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 it remained the same in 1997 and 2007.
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time
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the slightest was Portugal
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Portugal had the smallest percentage,
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 with slightly above 0%, from 1967 to 1987, it had a considerable increase to between 4% and 2%. From 1987 to 1997, it peaked above 4%
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 it remained the same until 2007.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words first, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • rise
  • increase
  • grow
  • go up
  • climb
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • decline
  • dip
  • peak
  • high
  • lowest
  • level
  • level off
  • stabilise
  • stabilize
  • flat
  • unchanged
  • remain
  • compare
  • in comparison with
  • whereas
  • while
  • higher than
  • lower than
  • the most
  • the least
  • over the period
  • during
  • between
  • from…to…
  • through
  • in the late
  • in the early
  • in the 1980s
  • all four
  • country
  • countries
  • emission per person
  • overall
  • in general
  • main features
  • notable
  • significant
  • pattern
  • change
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