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You recently visited a museum and were very impressed by it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: describe the museum you visited explain what you found interesting there suggest that your friend should visit the museum to

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I visited a
museum
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few
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a few
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 days ago
and
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 that was the one one best experience I ever had in my life. I need to mention that I am
that intrested
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interested
 in the histroy but what I witnessed over there was
completely
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a completely
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diffrenet
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different
 experience
which
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, which
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 made me
intrested
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interested
 and curious to
known
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know
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 more about the
histroy
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history
.
Where my
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 friend is already
instrested
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interested
 in history
has
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and has
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 a great knowledge about the same
so
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, so
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 for him to visit the
museum
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 would be nothing less than a pleasure
as
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, as
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 that
museum
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 in India. That
museum
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 is
truely
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truly
 based on the great history of India
which
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, which
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 covers
the almpost
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almost
 every small bit of that
so
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, so
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convinceing
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convincing
 him
wont
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won't
 be that
tough
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tough,
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 as his
intreset
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interest
 in the same would make morecurious to
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know
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 everything in depth
of everything and studying
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. Studying
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 is diffrent thing
but
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 experiencing everything is on complete diffrenet level.

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coherence cohesion
Add a clear start and end for the letter.
coherence cohesion
Use short paragraphs. Put one main idea in one part.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, so, because.
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Answer all three points more clearly: what the museum was like, what you liked, and why your friend should go.
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Write to your friend in a more direct way, like Dear Sam and See you soon.
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You clearly say the museum made you more interested in history.
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You give a reason why your friend may enjoy the museum.
coherence cohesion
Your ideas stay mostly on one topic: the museum and history.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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