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Write a letter to your friend about a job opportunity you came across that they might find interesting. In your letter, you should: - give some details about the job - mention how came across the job opportunity - explain why you feel the job would be suitable for your friend

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Dear Sarah, How are you doing? I hope you are all doing well. It's been ages
last
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 time we spoke. I am writing
this
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 letter to let you know about a
jop
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job
 opportunity that I came across yesterday.
To begin
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 with, the company where I work has been looking for a new product designer with
sheet
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a sheet
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 metal manufacturing background. Expectations from
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 opening are
visually
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to visually
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 create new city
furnitures
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furniture
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 like billboards,
benchs
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benches
, bus stations and present the new designs to the customers.
Moreover
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, it is said that they'll offer a generous salary for
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 role. At yesterday's meeting, which I
also
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 attended, it was decided that
such
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a
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 employee was necessary.
Job
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The job
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 posting will be published next week
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 before
that
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that,
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 I wanted to inform you about the job As I remember, you graduated from graphical design and on top of
that
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that,
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 you had been working in
machinery
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the machinery
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 industry before you moved here.
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, yours was the first name that came
in my
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to
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 mind yesterday. Let me know if
this
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 job excites you, and I will gladly share the details
to
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with
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 you. Hope to hear back from you soon. Best wishes, Ege

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task response
Task response: You answered all parts, but add a bit more about the job, like work time or place.
task response
Task response: Your tone is warm and friendly, but some word choice is not natural. Check words like 'jop' and 'such a employee'.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end, which is good.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some sentences are hard to follow. Use simpler links like 'also', 'so', and 'because'.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each part and make the time order clear.
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Task response: You clearly say what the job is, how you found it, and why Sarah is right for it.
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Task response: The letter feels personal and friendly.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The greeting and closing are both good for a letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph mostly has one clear main idea.
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