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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table illustrates date on
buyers
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buyers'
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 expenses on various products in five different regions in 2002.
Overall
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,
Turkey
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 had the greatest expenses on food, drinks and tobacco.
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, the
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Spain
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 was
lowest
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the lowest
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expending
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spender
 on education and
funny
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fun
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 activities,
in
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this
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,
Sweden
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 and Italy
were
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had
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 nearly the same expenses. First of all, in food and drinks, tobacco,
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turkey
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and turkey
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 was highest
country
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countries
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 with 32.14%. The second one was Ireland with 28.91%,
whereas
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,
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Spain
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 was lower with 18.80%. Italy accounted for 16.36%,
In compare
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compared
 with
Sweden
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was
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, which was
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 slightly lower with 15.77%. Clothing and shoes, Italy scored 9.00%,
while
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Turkey
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 was lower with 6.63%.
Sweden
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 represented for 5.40%, in
compration
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comparison
,
Spain
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 was higher with 6.51%,
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 Ireland was lower with 6.43%. Leisure and education, Italy and
Sweden
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 were identical with 3.22
%
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where
italy
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Italy
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 was 0.02% lower. The highest
conuntry
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country
 in
this
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 category was
Turkey
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 with 4.35%.
Whereas
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, the lowest country was
Spain
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 with 1.98%. Ireland stood for 2.21%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words turkey, spain, sweden with synonyms.
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