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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below.

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The graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the
amount
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number
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 of visits per year to Australia by foreign people over 30 years period,
whereas
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 the table
compare
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compares
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 the number of visitors in 1975 and 2005. Looking from an
overall
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percpective
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perspective
, it is evident that the
amount
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number
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 of visits experienced an upward trend during the given period.
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, the number of visitors
also
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 ascended significantly
and
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, and
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 the greatest rise
witnessed
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was witnessed
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 in Japan.
To begin
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 with, the line graph shows that ten
million
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 overseas residents visited Australia at the beginning of the period.
Then
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, the figure soared to 15
million
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 in 1985
,
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 and approximately 24
million
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 in the next decade. In 2005, it reached its peak, representing over 30
million
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.
According to
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table
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the table
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, all countries showed lower than 3
million
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 in 1975, meanwhile Japan stood out significantly with 3,2
million
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, followed by South Korea (2,9). All other nations represented
a
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tiny figures, accounting for 0,6 in average.
As a result
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, the total number of visitors
were
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was
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 only 8,8
million
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.
In contrast
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, it underwent a huge growth in 2005, making up over 30
million
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 in total. Japan still dominated with 12
million
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, and South Korea ranked
second,
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constituting over 9
million
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. The least growth was in China,
while
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 others
rpresented
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represented
 similar numbers, showing 0,9 and 2,9, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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