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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the specific
reasons
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 why people travel to
work
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 by diffrenet kind of
transports
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transport
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.
Reasons
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 for cycling to
work
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Health
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: Health
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 and
fitness
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,Less pollution,No parking problems,No costs,Faster than driving.
However
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,
Reasons
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 for driving to
work
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one of them
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include
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comfort
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,distance to
work
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,faster than cycling,need to carry things to
work
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,and safer than cycling.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 the
heighst
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highest
reasons
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 for cycling to
work
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is
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are health
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Health
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 and
fitness
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,and
Faster
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faster
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 than driving.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 the lowest one
faster
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is faster
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 than driving.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 the
heighst
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highest
reasons
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 for driving to
work
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is
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are
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comfort
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,and the Lowest safer than cycling. Regarding both of them
reasons
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 for cycling to
work
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has
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are
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health
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,
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apply
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and
fitness
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.
On the other hand
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 Less pollution
.
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,
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and
Reasons
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 for driving to
work
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has
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include
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comfort
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 and distance to
work
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. The
reasons
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 people travel to
work
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 by bicycle
has a
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have
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 several impact like
Health
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 and
fitness
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.
However
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,
resons
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reasons
 for driving to
work
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is
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are
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comfort
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 and less distance to
work
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, work, health, fitness, comfort with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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