IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 1

The rise of social media has affected personal relationships and society as a wole. Do the advantages of using social media for communication outweight the disadvantage.

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Try for free →
It
Correct pronoun usage
There
show examples
 is no denying the fact that
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
social media play important
in
Check wording
role in
show examples
aspect
Check wording
apply
show examples
our current life,
lead
Wrong verb form
leading
show examples
 to affect comunity and
peoples
Check wording
people's
show examples
 relationships. Which
reduce
Correct subject-verb agreement
reduces
show examples
 gathering and communication.
However
Linking Words
, there are arguments opposing
this
Linking Words
 idea. In
this
Linking Words
 easy will
analysis
Replace the word
analyse
 the topic for both points. The
most
Correct word choice
main
show examples
 advantages
for
Change preposition
of
show examples
 using social media
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
 easy communication with people in near and far country significantly with various
cultur
Correct your spelling
cultures
 and
language
Fix the agreement mistake
languages
show examples
.
For instance
Linking Words
,
persons
Check wording
people
show examples
 prefer to
connected
Wrong verb form
connect
show examples
 with
other
Replace the word
others
 via phone rather than in real life as save time and
busy
Verb problem
is busy
show examples
 with their responsibilities
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
 any time. On
other
Correct article usage
the other
show examples
 hand, there are
many
Correct determiner usage
apply
show examples
several disadvantages to technology
result
Correct pronoun usage
that result
show examples
to separate
Change preposition
in separating
show examples
 individuals
relatively to
Change preposition
from
show examples
 society and remove concept
gathering
Change preposition
of gathering
show examples
.
For example
Linking Words
, each member of
family
Correct article usage
the family
show examples
 they feeling no
belongings
Check wording
belonging
show examples
 to each other because the platform
lead
Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
show examples
 to loneliness. In conclusion,
although
Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
social media had benfits and

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Answer the main question more clearly. You need to say if the good points are more than the bad points.
task response
Add one more clear idea for each side. Now the ideas are short and not fully explained.
task response
Use examples that are more specific and easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
Make your essay plan clearer: intro, good points, bad points, then conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link your ideas with simple words like first, also, however, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Finish the conclusion. The last line is not complete.
task response
You wrote about both good and bad sides of social media.
coherence and cohesion
You used paragraphs for different parts of the essay.
task response
You gave examples to support your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interconnectedness
  • Networking
  • Digital literacy
  • Cybersecurity
  • False narratives
  • Echo chambers
  • Self-esteem
  • Cognitive biases
  • Virtual communities
  • Algorithmic bias
  • Privacy infringement
  • Social cohesion
  • Content moderation
  • Ephemeral content
  • Information overload
What to do next:
Look at other essays: