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Certain people truly believe that planning for the future is a complete waste of time. They think that the present should be the main focus. Do you agree with this view?

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Some
people
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 think that living for the moment and enjoying the present is more important than making
plans
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 for the
future
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. In my opinion, a
life
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 without any planning for the
future
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 can be chaotic and stressful. So
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 it is important to be present and enjoy the moment, a degree of planning is always required in order to live a full, happy
life
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. There are numerous reasons to make
plans
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 for the
future
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. It is probably true to say that
people
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 who have
goals
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 generally understand what they want in
life
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, and
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, have more confidence in their decisions since they have usually thought them through and planned them.
This
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 leads to higher levels of long-term happiness and success in many cases. Never knowing what you need to do next or constantly making mistakes and forgetting important events can be highly stressful and severely affect your quality of
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,
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 your long-term health.
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, making
plans
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 for the
future
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 provides
people
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 with motivation. In fact, most individuals are motivated by a vision they have for their
future
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. Making
plans
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 for the
future
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 renders a person's growth more feasible. It is true that even the most successful
people
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 can become distracted and discouraged at times.
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, they may find it difficult to fully appreciate their accomplishments and enjoy their success. Having clearly defined
goals
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 can help
minimize
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 issue.
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, a balanced lifestyle that includes specific and realistic
goals
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,
together with
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 a healthy amount of focusing on the present, is more likely to lead to long-term happiness and
fulfillment
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. There is evidence that suggests that purposefully focusing on the present can be part of a healthy, balanced lifestyle. Practices
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 as mindfulness and meditation,
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, have numerous reported benefits,
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 as reducing stress and even blood pressure. In conclusion, I believe that developing a long-term strategy and concentrating on the present are not mutually exclusive. Concentrating on clear
goals
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 helps individuals to become more
organized
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 in their daily lives and happier
overall
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.
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, it would be better if
people
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 started planning for their futures as soon as possible, but without neglecting their short-term happiness and
wellbeing
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well-being
.

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task response
For task response, your answer is clear and stays on the topic. To get a higher score, add one more very clear real-life example to support your view.
task response
For task response, your opinion is clear from the start and stays the same. This is good. But some ideas are a bit general, so try to explain them in a more direct way.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay is easy to follow and the paragraphing is strong. To improve more, make some links between ideas feel more natural, not only by using linking words.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, each paragraph has a clear main idea. To reach a higher band, develop one point a little more deeply before moving to the next point.
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For task response, you answer all parts of the question and give a clear opinion.
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For task response, your ideas are relevant and well explained in most parts of the essay.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your ideas move in a logical order and are easy to understand.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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