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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel

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The line graph describes the changes in the
amount
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number
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 of
cars
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 manufactured in 6 different countries during the period from 2020 to 2035. As
it
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shown by the graph,
while
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 the numbers of
cars
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 in
manufactory
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manufacturing
 in the UK, the USA and Japan are forecasted
rapid
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 falls, the figure for China is expected to increase gradually over the period to become the dominant by 2035. In 2020, the number of
cars
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 manufactured in Japan, which was the leading at that time, was around 340 hundred
thousands
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thousand
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, followed by the USA and the US with approximately 300 and 200
units
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 respectively. At
the
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least one is China with only 100
hundred
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units
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 at the same time. The
amount
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number
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 of
cars
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in manufactory
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manufactured
 in Japan rose slightly by around 20 hundred
units
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 in 2025 before experiencing a sharp plummet. The anticipation indicates that
this
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 trend is projected to still decline quickly
with
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 around only 100 in 2035.
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, the smallest one at first is predicted to grow the most moderately and substantially, and no longer will overtake all the other three countries in 2035, with 160 hundred thousands. Speaking of the USA and the UK, it is estimated that they both will continue
decrease
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to decrease
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 to around
under
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50
units
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at the end
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 of the surveyed timeframe.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modes of travel
  • average distance
  • per person per year
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change/trend
  • vehicle usage
  • public transportation
  • technological advancements
  • societal changes
  • economic growth
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