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In many countries, there is a growing concern about the excessive use of plastic and its detrimental impact on the environment. Some argue that implementing a plastic tax would discourage the use of plastic products. Do you agree or disagree?

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products
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task response
Give a more clear answer in the first part. Say fully that you agree, and keep this same view all through the essay.
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Add more clear main ideas in each body part. One main idea, then explain it, then give one short example.
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Use examples that are more exact and easy to understand. This will make your ideas stronger.
coherence cohesion
Make each paragraph follow a simple order: main idea, reason, example, result.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words in a more careful way. Some are used, but at times they do not fit the meaning well.
coherence cohesion
Check that each sentence connects clearly to the one before it. This will help the reader follow your points.
task response
You answered the topic and gave your opinion about plastic tax.
coherence cohesion
You included both an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence cohesion
You used paragraphs to separate your ideas.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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