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Some believe that research on family hisotry is a useful thing to do, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and five your own opinion.

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Some people think that
read
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reading
 and
chik
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checking
 the family history has a lot of
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benefits
,
while
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 others do not prefer that . In my
opinon
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opinion
, when you research
on
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family history ,
therefore
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 that will make you depend on it , when you see anyone from
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 family just
becuase
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because
 you read about the
sventh grendfather
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seventh grandfather
 for
this
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 person was
silfish
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selfish
, you will think that person is
same
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the same
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 ,
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otherwise
if you read for
learn
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learning
,
such
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royl
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royal
families
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families,
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 that will develop your
carrer
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career
. On
side
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the side
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 of
viwe
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view
, read about
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hisotry
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history
 for your family or your frinds in fact ,
does
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it does
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 not have any meaning  because you do not know or read uplifting things ,
on the contrary
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,
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it can make you depend on it when you see anyone from
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for
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example
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example,
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 if your mom
tell
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tells
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 you
story
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a story
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 about one family ,in
this
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 story she says they are kind,
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nice
 and
paiolet
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polite
, you will love
this
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 family and want to meat any one from them .
On the other hand
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 , some people disagree
to
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with
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 researching
about
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families ,
becuase
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because
 they
belive
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believe
 it
do
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does
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 not have any useful
thing in that
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information
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, but in fact , that depend on your
goles
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goals
 and what family you will research
about it
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apply
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,
such
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royl
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royal
 families , or about
family
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families
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 who do
somthing
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something
 important in
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hisotry
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history
. In the
conslusion
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conclusion
,research on family
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hisotry
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history
 is useful if you
searching
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are searching
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 about family who do
somthing sginificent
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something significant
 in
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hisotry
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history
.

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Answer both sides more fully. You say one side, but the other side is not fully clear.
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Give your own opinion in a clear way from start to end.
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Use main ideas that are easy to follow. Now some ideas are mixed.
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Add simple and real examples to support each main point.
coherence and cohesion
Make one clear topic for each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use link words in a simple way, like on the one hand, on the other hand, for example, in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating the same idea many times.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction and a conclusion.
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You try to discuss both sides of the topic.
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You give some examples to explain your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraph breaks, which is good.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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