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The table shows the proportion of people in England who agreed with same-sex marriage from 1989 to 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table illustrates the
numbers
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number
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 of
people
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are
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who are
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 in agreement on
the
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apply
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same-sex marriage from 1989 to 2013.
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, without
religion
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tribes
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, tribes
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 were the highest agreeing,
in
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at
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 the end of
time
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.
While
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,
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apply
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 the lowest were
non-
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non-Christian
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christian
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people
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, in the first
of
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part of
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 the period. At the same
time
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, other
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christian
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Christian
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 and
roman
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catholic
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also
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church
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 of
england
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 were similar to each other. First of all, by 1989, different
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christian
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Christian
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,
roman
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catholic
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 and
church
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 of
UK
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the UK
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 were the same with 9%,
whereas
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,
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apply
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 non-
christian
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 were lower with 5%,
compare
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compared
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 with
no
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the no
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religion
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 group were higher with 20. By 1995, no
religion
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people
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 were the highest
this
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 year with 32%, after them,
Romanion
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Roman Catholic
catholic
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 with 21%.
Church
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 of
England
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 and other
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christian
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Christians
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 had a near similarity with 14%, but
,
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apply
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 different
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religion
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religions
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 were lower by 1%. In
comparsion
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comparison
 with those,
non-
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non-Christian
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christian
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 were the lowest
this
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 year with 11%. After six years,
people
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 without
religous
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religious affiliation
 were the greatest figures with 53%,
roman
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catholic
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 came after them with 38%.
While
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church
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the Church
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 of
england
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 were lower than them with 31%. Different
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religion
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religions
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 were
hiher
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higher
 than
previous
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in previous
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 years with 12%. From 2001 to
2007
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2007,
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 the non
christian
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 were the same
with
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, with
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 19%,
also
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church
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 of Uk remained the same
with
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, with
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 31%. By 2007,
roman
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catholic
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 were slightly lower than
previous
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the previous
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 six years with 1%
,
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apply
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,
while
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non-
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non-religious
religion
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people
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higher
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were higher
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 than before with 64%
this
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 year.
in
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At
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 the same
time
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, others chrstians increased slightly to 38%. By 2013,
roman
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catholic
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 had a dramatic increase to 61%,
while
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 chruch of
England
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 and others
christian
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 were nearly the same with 55%, but others
christian
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 were slightly lower by 1%. At the same
time
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,
The
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the
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 highest were
non-
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non-religious
religion
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 with 77%,
while
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non-
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non-Christian
christian
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 were lower with 30%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, religion, time, christian, roman, catholic, church, england with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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