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The diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for the changes to the school site in 2024

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The two maps depict the
school
Use synonyms
 area in 2004 and
change
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the change
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 plan in 2024.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the site is being used more efficiently in
2024
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the 2024
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 plan to accommodate more students.
New
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A new
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school
Use synonyms
 building and car park
was
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were
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 added,
while
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 sport field was larger in the initial plan.
Firstly
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,
new
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a new
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 car park and the road linking it with the main entrance
was
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were
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 constructed in 2024.
Additionally
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,
new
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a new
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school
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 building was erected to fit more students
and
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, and
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 the corridor between
school
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 buildings one and two was constructed.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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