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The bar chart compares the number of nurses in 3 hospitals between 2015 and 2020.

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The bar chart compares the number of
nurses
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 in 3 hospitals between 2015 and 2020.
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overall
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, the number of
nurses
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 increased in all hospitals over the period. Hospital
C
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 had the highest number throughout,
while
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 Hospital A had the lowest. In 2015, Hospital
C
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 employed 250
nurses
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, which was much higher than Hospital B
with
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, with
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 180
nurses
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 and Hospital A
with
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, with
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 120
nurses
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. By 2020, all hospitals saw growth, with Hospital
C
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 rising to 320
nurses
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. Hospital B
also
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 increased significantly to 260
nurses
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,
whereas
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 Hospital A showed the smallest growth, reaching only 150
nurses
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. The gap between Hospital
C
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 and Hospital A widened over the 5 years.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nurses, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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