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Band 3.5

people think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems. Give your opinion.

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I totally agree with
this
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statment
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statement
 about increasing
prices
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the prices
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 of
fuel
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 in order to avoid
nature
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air
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 pollution.Nowadays, it is
so
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a
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 current version and exiting problem for
majority
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the majority
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people
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of people
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 who worry about our future.
However
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 , what can we do to solve
this
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 issue in the near future? On one hand,
It
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it
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 is
correct
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a correct
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 decision
and
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, and
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 pupils will start to buy
a
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apply
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fuel
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 in smaller quantities.
For instance
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, when I refuel the car
first
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, first
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 of all I look at the price ,
moreover
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 it makes me wonder.
Also
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, we will choose more natural vehicles to save money , in consequence nation will decrease air pollution.
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,when I ride a
bike
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bike,
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 I never spend my money.
In addition
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, choosing renewable
fuel
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 will
be dropped
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reduce
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 toxins in our
environmental
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environment
.
On the other hand
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,
rising
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raising
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 the cost will
proceed
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lead
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 to financial crises
which
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, which
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very
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is very
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 bad for every country and
folk
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its people
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 too.As
a
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apply
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proof, every time
while
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 growing the price of
fuel
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 whole products are more expensive.
Likewise
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, it can be the reason
of
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for
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 a War because inflation is difficulties for comfortable life.In the addendum,
while
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 high increasing
the
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, the
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price -
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apply
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salary
stays
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remains
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 at the past level , small. In conclusion, if prices on the
fuel
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grows
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grow
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, it will
the
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be a
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 real challenge for everyone with advantages and disadvantages. But
mostly
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most
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 of these solve the problems with nature , pollution and
environmental
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the environment
. I am sure
,
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that
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in the
future
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future,
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 many people will choose mechanical transport without using
the
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apply
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fuel
Use synonyms
.

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task response
Give a clear answer in the first part and keep the same view all through the essay.
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Add more clear main ideas and explain each one with a simple reason.
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Use examples that are more real and more exact.
coherence and cohesion
Make one main idea for each body part and do not mix too many points.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy linking words well, like First, Also, However, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order so each next sentence follows the one before it.
task response
You answered the question and gave your view.
coherence and cohesion
You wrote both an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You used paragraphing and some linking words.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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