The maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimswille

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The maps illustrate the latest developments in Kimsville town from 2002 to the present day.

Overall

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while

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some facilities,

such

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factory

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a factory

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and

old

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an old

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cinema, have experienced significant changes, others have remained unchanged.

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, new facilities have appeared over the period.

To begin

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with, the factory has made way for a modern software company office, which shows a gradual shift towards economic growth,

whereas

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the old cinema has been converted into a pub.

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, there were green spaces at the four corners of the town. One of them

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, on

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the top left

side

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side,

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has been replaced by new apartments allowing the town to accommodate more residents, and the other one

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, on

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the

low

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lower

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left

side

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side,

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has been demolished

and

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, and

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a football stadium has been built. The other green spaces with trees have shown no change.

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, a new train station has appeared on the left side of the city centre.

Finally

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, the city centre and shopping centre stayed unchanged.

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Jun 6, 2026

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

160 words

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The maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimswille

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