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In the future all cars, busses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
nowsdays
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nowadays
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technology
 is advancing
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rapidly
, and many
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people
 believe that
vehicles
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 will become
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driveless
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driverless
 in the future.
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although
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 there are some disadvantages ,
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 believe that the advantages outweigh them.
Body paragraph 1
one
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 major advantage is that driverless
vehicles
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 could reduce
roud
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road
 accidents,many accidents happen
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because
 drivers become
distractes
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distracted
 by their
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phones
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.
self driving
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Self-driving
 technology may help make
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roads
 safer .
in addtion
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In addition
,
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driveless
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driverless
vehicles
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 could
benfit
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benefit
 families and
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older
 people who are unable to drive, allowing them to travel more
essily
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easily
 and independently.
Body paragraph 2
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however
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, there are
also
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 some drawbacks.
the
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 main disadvantage is that many people who work as drivers may lose their jobs.
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for
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 example , taxi, bus , and truck drivers could face
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unemployment
 if
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driveless
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driverless
vehicles
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 become
widelu
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widely
 used.
Conclusion
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 conclusion,
while
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driveless
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driverless
vehicles
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 may cause some
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job
 losses,
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I
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 believe their
benfits
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benefits
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especially
 improved safety and convenience, are
grater
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greater
 than the
disaavange
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disadvantages
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Write one more idea for the bad side. This will make your answer more full.
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Explain your ideas more. Say how and why driverless cars make roads safer.
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Use one clear example with more detail, not only one short line.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body paragraph with a clear main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words carefully, like 'first', 'also', 'however', and 'therefore'.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects to the one before it.
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You answer the question and give a clear opinion.
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You include both good points and bad points.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is easy to follow most of the time.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • human error = mistakes made by people
  • road safety = how safe the roads are
  • self-driving vehicle = a vehicle that drives itself
  • passenger = a person who travels in a car, bus, or train but does not drive
  • traffic flow = the movement of cars on roads
  • reduce accidents = make the number of accidents lower
  • save time = use time in a better way
  • lose jobs = no longer have work
  • safety risk = danger to people’s safety
  • software problem = a problem in the computer system
  • be hacked = be attacked by criminals through a computer system
  • follow rules = obey rules
  • public trust = people’s belief that something is safe and good
  • outweigh = be greater than
  • in the long term = over a long time
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