The pie charts and table illustrates the information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US in the years 1988, 1992, and 2000.

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The pie chart and table represent information about the total value of fish imported to the USA between the years 1988,1992 and 2000.
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,the total value of fish imports increased steadily over the period.
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, Canada was the largest supplier in 1988,
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other
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became the main source in 1992 and 2000.
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,the proportion of seafood imported from China increased significantly.
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with,the total value of fish imports rose from 6.75$ in 1988 to 8.52$ in 1992 before reaching 10.72$ in 2000.
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,Canada accounted for the largest share with 60%, followed by other people 27%,
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china with only 13%. By 1992, Canada’s share had dropped significantly to 34%,
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the proportion for other
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had risen to 46%. China
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experienced growth, reaching approximately 20%.
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, in 2000, other countries remained the main source at 42%. China’s share continued to increase to 30%,
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Canada’s proportion declined
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to 28%.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Import origins
  • Total import value
  • Trends in import values
  • Trade patterns
  • Source distribution
  • Import dependency
  • Fluctuations in trade
  • Economic implications
  • Demand and supply dynamics
  • International trade policies
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