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More and more tasks we do at home and at work these days are done by robots. Is this a positive or negative development? Huy Cao

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Major of
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Many
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tasks
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 that
previously
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were previously
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 done by humans are
replaced
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being replaced
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with
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by
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 robots. I think it is a positive development, because it makes life easier and
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time saving
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time-saving
.
Firstly
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,
shorting
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shortening
 the
repeatetive
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repetitive
tasks
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 leaves
a
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an
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 extra
time
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 to live. Daily home
tasks
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 do not provide
boost
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a boost
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 for your career ladder or bring more money. When you have more
time
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,
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this is more
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it's
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 easier
to
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to achieve your goals without worrying and spending energy that you could
spent
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spend
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 on projects.
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,
vacuum
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a vacuum
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 cleaner saves about 4 hours per week, works
autonomily
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autonomously
 and
requiers
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requires
 only 15 minutes to be cleaned and checked.
Secondly
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, it is
arduos
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arduous
 to spend your
time
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 and thoughts
to
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 extra
tasks
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. When you are free from them,
clean
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a clean
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 enviroment positivily effects on productivity. It is easier to be
miticulous
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meticulous
 on your aims without distractions
such
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 as washing dishes,
maping
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mopping
 and
sweping
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sweeping
 the
floars
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floors
.
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, people who earn above 100.000 usd per year do not spend
time
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 on household
tasks
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. In conclusion, it is have more positive effect on life and makes it easier,
therefore
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 robots
are serving for
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serve
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 people's good correctly.

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Answer both sides a bit more, then show why your side is better.
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Make each main idea bigger with one clear reason and one simple example.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Write full clear topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
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Check that each example really supports the main point well.
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You gave a clear opinion from the start and kept it to the end.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You used examples to support your ideas.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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