Some people believe that having a pet such as a cat or a dog helps older people live a more enjoyable life and try to stay healthier. How do you think older people benefit from having a pet? Do you think there is a problem with older people having pets? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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It is believed that owning a
pet
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as an elderly person brings more joy in life and
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improves
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health
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. I agree with
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statement because it will not only be
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beneficial
to older
people
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but
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positively effects on their mental
health
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. Older
people
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usually stop going out and limit their physical activity
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, which
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is detrimental to their
health
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and
exacerbate
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exacerbates
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the existing diseases. Pets
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as cats and dogs like to go out
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, and
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owning them
increase
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increases
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the activity of older
people
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, so they can be
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nature more.
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,
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who
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for a walk with their pets
less
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are less
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likely to suffer from cancer.
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, elderly
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need to own a
pet
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because it positively effects on their physical
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and may prevent diseases. Owning a
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may solve
loneliness
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the loneliness
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problem
amoung
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among
elderly
people
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. Most of them do not interact with their close friends, co-workers and family enough.
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, experiencing anxiousness and
feeling
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feelings
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of being unheard
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negatively on their mental
health
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and leads to depression.
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,
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physcologists having a cat or a dog may decrease the level of stress
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35
percent
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per cent
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.
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, older
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need pets because they can
read of the
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relieve
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loneliness,
having
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have
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a
talk
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conversation
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with them and
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stabilise
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their mental
health
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. In conclusion, I believe that older
people
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need to own a
pet
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because it gives them the
tought
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thought
that they are needed, feel special and good impact on their mental and physical
health
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.

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task response
Answer both parts more clearly. You explain benefits well, but you do not really explain the problems of old people having pets.
coherence and cohesion
Use more direct ideas. In one body paragraph, write one main point and explain it step by step.
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Give examples that are more clear and real. Some examples now are too general and not fully explained.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, for example, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence meaning carefully. Some lines are hard to follow, so your message is not always clear.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You give two main benefits of pets: better body health and less loneliness.
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Your opinion is clear from the start and stays the same through the essay.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Companionship
  • Loneliness
  • Depression
  • Emotional support
  • Sense of purpose
  • Routine
  • Physical health
  • Social interactions
  • Stress reduction
  • Cortisol levels
  • Serotonin
  • Cognitive benefits
  • Problem-solving
  • Mental activities
  • Sense of security
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